Should I Enter This In A Poetry Contest? If So, Which One?

March 17th, 2009 | Fly Fish Lessons | 9 Comments »

If I could fly,
I would be
up in the sky,
I could dip and dive
be alive,
I would try,
but I might cry
…better not.

Look at me,
I could be
deep
in the sea,
swimming and free,
like fishes, but we
…might get caught, better not.

Listen here,
to the words written clear,
have a beer,
so the lessons get taught
not forgot,
and the fear
…gives up what you’ve got, might get caught, better not.

Many people have made a lot of money writing 'childish' verse. This was a fun read. It should be entered into a Shakespearean Sonnet competition! At least to break up the monotony! lol

9 Responses

  1. AlexandraAlex says:

    It is written pretty childishly. I don't know, it's like a 10 year old composed it when bored. It is tacky. I don't like it a lot. Sorry. The "beer" thing ruins it completely.
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  2. Yug says:

    I thought they were all one poem! I like it/them!
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  3. Lena says:

    Sorry, but I agree with the first answer. Too childish. Sorry. :(
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  4. neonman says:

    Many people have made a lot of money writing 'childish' verse. This was a fun read. It should be entered into a Shakespearean Sonnet competition! At least to break up the monotony! lol
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  5. Inching back to poppyheaven says:

    I thought it was fun and lighthearted.
    Sometimes we need a bit of "childish" light in our lives. I'd rather read this than some stagnant, showy poem who's words you have to wade through to get to the end.
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  6. Awkward says:

    this is many poems?
    i seriously loved this one :D
    and i def. agree with poppy (think of Shel Silverstein, or Dr. Sues)
    id rather a 'childish' poem then some booring, slow overly-showy words with no real point

    mm…i dunno what kinda poetry contest you could give this to since i'm not familiar with any…maybe you should just google poetry contests, see what's out there, and then make your decision
    as in
    yes, you should try your luck w/this one :)
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  7. Elaine P says:

    It would be perfect illustrated in a children's book — at least the first two stanzas. They could be written as two poems or as a two-stanza poem. I don't think the beer poem would be appropriate.
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    Contest information:. There's one running on the following website: http://www.poetsofmars.com. There's an annual contest and contests run throughout the year as well.

  8. DAHha's ship says:

    What is nice about Yahoo poetry, is you get good critiques — sometimes. When you think you have revised your poem to the point where you would be proud to have others read it, you can send it here:

    http://www.poetsofmars.com

    There's this guy, who I think works 24/7. Send it in, and poof, it's on the forum or contest site. Magic!
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  9. lilly45 says:

    The word is clear – that fear can destroy all action and aspirations. The reference that beer may be a tool for learning – can be misleading to younger readers ♥
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